Rawr, Rawr, Goes the Dinosaur in Dinosaur Valley
I like writing.
I like writing a lot.
I like writing like Dr. Suess.
Dr. Suess is an awesome writer.
Watch me write.
Read my handwriting.
It is obvious that I do not have the
best penmanship.
However, good penmanship is not the
most telling and defining characteristic of a good writer.
A good writer can also be defined as
the creative person in the room.
I like writing. I like writing a lot. I like writing like Dr. Suess. Dr. Suess is an awesome writer. Watch me write.
The red writing is where other people took over. Despite the difference in sentence length, I think the story worked really well together. As sentences, each of them work and link together. The end sentence is a bit different than the starting conversation, but it doesn't kill the tone/mood of the paragraph. In fact, I believe it completes it.
I didn't really have to do any editing aside from adding an ending sentence.
Other Students Work
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