AP Style Tips: Exercise

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The first sentence should read:

    Anne O'Nymous, Assistant News Editor, read the article.

The author should include some information more relevant to the article than that she "read the article".  Maybe include a quote to get her reaction.

The second should read:

    "I really appreciate her work ethic and problem-solving ability," said Jameson.

The quote should come first, even better if it is it's own paragraph.  The first part of the sentence should be omitted because it is redundant, and just paraphrases the speaker.  Also include the full name and description of the speaker if this is the first time they are mentioned.

The third sentence should read:

    Although Spunky Inkworthy has only written for the Setonian this year, Lazarus O'Mortigan, Obituaries Editor for the paper, spoke highly of Inkworthy's contributions.

"Although" and "only" might be perceived as biased, but most likely can be included in this situation.  Name first, description second.  Always use last name instead of first name when subsequently referring to a person in the article.

The fourth sentence should read:

    In a telephone conversation with Marian Paroo, Head Librarian at Seton Hill University, Paroo discussed Inkworthy's contributions.

Try to use pronouns as little as possible.

And the last sentence shouldn't be included at all, since it is completely irrelevant, but the proper form would be:

"Here is a quote," said Bill Jones, freshman at Seton Hill University.

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