Kilian exercises 4 & 5

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exercise 4. I wasn't sure how to do the whole readability thing so I basically re-worded some sentences and and dropped a lot of repeated words and useless phrases.

 

 

Those Who Can, Do. Those Who Can Do Really Well, Teach!

               [Word count: 520, Fog Index: 7.7] new word count: 440

If you're graduating this June, you're probably not thinking much beyond this summer: a job, some travel, going back to college, etc.

         If you're going on to Graduate school next September, expect to be shocked. Your teachers are likely to be older than your parents. If you go into a vocational or trades program, the same is likely to be true.

         Forty years ago, the schools were caught in a tidal wave called the baby boom. A huge mass of kids (your parents) were moving through the system, and the schools were desperate to find teachers for them. A whole generation, born in the late 1930s and early 1940s found that schools were always hiring. Teaching was "what you can always fall back on," they used to say.

         The teachers hired in the 1960s and 70s are retiring now. We don't have a baby boom, but we do have an economy that needs lots of educated workers. So as old teachers retire, the system will need new ones -- not just science, English and history teachers, but ones who are skilled in many areas as well.

         A recent BC survey predicts that in the next few years we'll need 40,000 new workers in the natural and applied sciences. 90,000 jobs will be waiting for people in trades, transportation, and equipment operation. Sales and service will need 180,000 new workers.

        Other high-growth job fields include everything from graphic design, to nursing, to management in accommodation, food, and retail. This good timing will allow job opportunities straight out of college.

         But think about your choices. With so many jobs, you might as well pick a field you really enjoy. Train for sales or management. With visual skills you can  learn graphic design and multimedia. Love your car? Learn an automotive trade. No matter what you choose, some employer will be out there waiting to pay you to have fun.

         That's not all. With employers fighting to hire the next generation of skilled workers, demand will be high for still more workers. Colleges, universities, and vocational schools will be fighting also to find qualified people to teach everything from law to Chinese cooking.

         If you can do, teach! As a newly qualified employee, you'll be familiar with current practices and technology. You can teach part time, and participate in teacher-training programs. You'll be able to train people who may be working alongside you, so you can make sure they learn what the qualifications.

         So pay attention to those older teachers in your courses next year. You may be stepping into their jobs before you know it.

It's Your Choice

               [Word count: 500, Fog Index: 9.3] new word count: 332

It's your first day on the job. As a first task, your boss hands you a check for $735,800.

         "Tear it up," he says.

         That is what you would be doing if you did not complete grades k-12. According to statistics in Canada, the average income in 2001 was $25,671 for British Columbians completing grade 12 and a few post-secondary courses. Over a 40-year working life, that means you'd make just over $1 million.

         But if you go into the workforce with a university degree, your lifetime income will average $735,800 more.

         If you skip post-secondary, you will be losing money and most likely working a job you are not happy with. The more education you have, the more choices you have. So how do you maximize your choices as you leave high school?

         Start by going from grade 12 into academic post-secondary courses. That gives you three choices: continue at university, switch to a career program after a year or two, or find a job with the option of returning to school later. Suppose you decide after academic courses that you want some practical job training. Many college career programs now require 1-2 years of academic coursework before they'll even consider you. You would have more programs to choose from and a better chance to be accepted. If you take your academic courses in college, you can transfer to university -- and you'll have saved money by taking two years at lower tuition fees.

         But what if you settle for a college diploma in some career field? StatsCan says your average income will be about $33,000. That's less than you'd get with a BA. Many career programs now offer degrees as well, in fields like business administration and tourism management which provide more choices.

         Sometimes we don't have all the choices we'd like but if you think about what you want to do with your life, you'll realize you do have some options.

Exercise 5 (corporate websites)

https://www.bankofamerica.com/index.jsp

This website was Bank of America. It's a small homepage with small writing and everything is kind of pushed together in a minimal amount of amount space. The left side is where all the navigation and words are, leaving the right side mostly open and blank. The website is obviously targeted towards people who are members of Bank of America or to anyone who wants to know more about it. There are several links to different options, almost too many in my opinion, making it look cramped. However, I dont think this is a website that is meant to be appealing to viewers. It is mainly for business purposes.

 

http://disneyworld.disney.go.com/wdw/index

This site was fairly easy to navigate through. The navigation system was at the top. The pages are full of animation, colors, sound, and videos. It makes going to Disney World an attractive trip. It provides useful links such as resort options and maps. This site can also be targeted towards kids because they can click on fun links like characters and read about their favorite Disney characters and play games. The only downfall of this website is that some of the pages have too much on them, such as pictures and floating animation, that it becomes consuming and overwhelming.

 

 http://www.fedex.com/us/

The Fedex website made you enter your country before going into the actual page. This is smart because then it can destinguish the language that the site will be in. In the main page there is again a place to log in if you have an account created. Here you can track a package or even ship something out from the website. The page is also pretty scrunched with smaller words, similar to the Bank of America website. There is no scroll bar and the right side of the page is mostly blank. 

 

 

 

 

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