Sir, what you had there was what we refer to as a focused non-terminal repeating phantasm, or a Class 5 Full Roaming Vapor. A real nasty one, too.~Dr. Ray Stantz, Ghostbusters
"Well, what's the most important here? The cancellation of the trip? The acknowledgment? The bit about the strong defense?" (Cappon, 24)
Lately, I've been having some trouble deciding what the most important information is in a story, especially in our latest assignment, the accident report. I have been trying to include both parts of the story (The car hitting a pedestrian and the package getting stolen). However, it just seems to loose the articles importance when I try. I still think that I should be using both because they are both important leads but I just can't figure out how to do it. I'm trying not to lose my focus in the process which I think is what keeps getting me. I feel like my lead is similar to the title of this blog, where people read it and just go, "Huh?". After I read the chapter, I had a better grip on how to write a decent lead, but I still couldn't decide if I should use one story, or the both of them since they are in fact connected.
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