The Blade
Disclaimer: Please don't take this as some kind of suicidal bit on my part, because it's not.
The Blade
Silver, clean, and so much sharper
Than the tongue; the tip pressed
lightly, it's threatening the lung.
Sweeter songs than this simply
Don't exist, even in the chorus.
The voices are happy, but
They're so empty, and the sound
Isn't making a difference;
No difference to him.
The room is deserted, and no one
Will know, and though time will be
Wasted, so much quicker he'll go.
At least they'll still have the notebook,
The stained pages with every little hope
Or chance or memory; but he's kinda
Disturbed by the fact that his life's
In black ink. He'll never recover;
He's not a fighter nor a lover, and he
Is so hopeless (beyond the redemption
road) in the eyes of every judge
That he cared about. They thought
He was breaking down, when he
Was really only breaking out.
The blade just keeps talking, and it's
Hard for him to leave, but this is what
He wants, and it's what he believes.
Comments
Lori, Sue, I'm glad you like it--I'm not sure where it came from (I mean, I was eating ice cream cake at the time, and I doubt that had anything to do with it), but it was a major breakthrough for me; I've kinda lost my motivation to write poetry lately.
Amanda, you've got a good point; actually, when I read someone else's work, I tend to try to find a character role to put myself into, rather than assume that they are all directly related to the author. I'm not really sure why that is... I guess it just helps me develop a more personal connection to the writing.
Posted by: ChrisU | March 31, 2005 9:53 PM
I've written disclaimers on my poetry before because I don't want people to worry. That's probably because I write so much about my life on my blog...friends, family think I am going through something, when that isn't necessarily the case.
In some ways you (not "you" specifically, but writers, in general) separate yourself from the work you are creating, but in others, part of you is seen -or perceived- in your work. But to make the assumption that in every work, "you" as a person is there, is to limit the writer and the art.
Posted by: Amanda | March 31, 2005 6:35 PM
Hey, I like it, whether its dark or not, I think its really good :)
Posted by: Sue | March 31, 2005 1:57 PM
Nicely done. It flows, and it rhymes, in a slantward way. And i don't think its suicidal related, your too happy for that(cough**Amanda**cough), and i always write dark poems, and im not suicidal...
Posted by: Lori | March 31, 2005 1:41 PM