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So this is my final rough draft of my Dads Raising Daughters website. With this website, I tried to inlcude helpful information to those fathers who are raising daughters alone. With my personal experience, I feel that my advice is more helpful than a doctor's.

I want to appeal to both the fathers and the daughters. Even though my sight is small and only 5 pages deep, I think I was able to include enough information.

I have some questions.

Does my site seem appealing to both audiences?

Is the background distracting? Colors?

Does anything seem unnecessary or wordy?

Is the overall format ineffective?

I hope everyone else is having a great time with this term project and if anyone has any questions or needs a tester, email me. Thanks.

BETA RELEASE

I am my own worst critic. No matter what I do to a website or for any other project, I will always have more criticism to give to myself than others do.

I am passionate about the subject that I'm working with so I will be able to criticize myself more than any other person because I have been through this experience and I know what I want to include on the site but nothing is ever good enough.

While doing the alpha testing, I was able to get ideas from other classmates as well as get tips on how to do something to my own site. While my site right now is very plain and boring, I received tips and feedback on "spicing" up my site with a different background that is family related or father/daughter related.

I asked a question on a previous blog on whether or not I should include a page that describes my personal experience with this subject. Many classmates told me that I should and even proposed ideas that maybe I could get other women's experiences to put on the site that explain their experience with being raised by a daughter.

While my information is good, I was told that I just need to make my site a little more interesting.

Here is what the site looks like now.

For my term project for EL236, I decided to do an informative website. My idea is to create a website specifically designed for single fathers raising daughters. I hope to include other information for other single parents, whether a mother or a father, on tips on how to raise a child. Some of the information provided would be from my own personal experience which would be more beneficial than a psychologist's opinion on a situation they probably never experienced.

There are approximately 13.6 million single parents in the United States today, and those parents are responsible for raising 21.2 million children. Single parents face many challenges when raising a child alone. For a single dad, raising a daughter can feel like competing in a never-ending marathon with fifty-pound weights on your legs.

As a woman who grew up only with her father from the age of 2 till I went off to college, I looked towards my father for advice as both a father and a mother. Experiencing a father raising a daughter first hand, I was able to see how hard it was for him to play both the father and mother role. Having your parents divorced is already very difficult to handle, but having only one parent, especially a father, is an obstacle for both the parent and the daughter.

My website will include information on how to:

• Open lines of communication.
• Don't overprotect.
• Teach indenpendency.
• Don't do it alone.
• Being involved.
• And being up front and honest with awkward situations.

The most recent text we read in Writing of Fiction (EL236), Don't Make Me Think! by Steve Krug, seemed very similar to the previous text we read, Writing for the Web 3.0 by Crawford Kilian.

Krug explained to me that in a website, we need to eliminate the possibilites of questions, realize that the homepage is "waterfront property", usability testing is absolutely necessary in order to have a great site, and don't ask for unnecessary personal information from your users. Krug's book talked a lot about interaction and in our class we were able to use this knowledge and actually see it in action by creating our own usability tests and websites. As a user of the internet, I learned through this text about all aspects of the web like creating sites, usability testing and the do's and dont's of the internet. For the book being published 8 years ago, the ideas and tips are standard and universal as well as extremely helpful with Krug's short sentences, examples, and graphics.

This third portfolio displays my work and thoughts throughout these past couple weeks of the class. We learned about hypertext readings, interactive fiction games, learned about usability testing from Krug and we were able to create inform 7 games in groups and individually.

Coverage: Entries that include a direct quote from the assigned reading, that identify the source of the quote, and that links back to the course web page devoted to that reading.

My hatred of IF games

Krug, Introduction to Chapter 3

Krug and there's no place like home

Krug's Waterfront Property

My experience with the IF game Slouching Towards Bedlam

Usability testing with Krug

Wikipedia, an academic resource?

My contributions to Wikipedia

Timeliness: Entries that were posted on time (24 hours before class).

Wikipedia Edits

Wikipedia Articles (Softball, SHU and  SVC)

The policies and pillars of Wikipedia

Moral responsibility and Wiki?

Krug, Introduction to Chapter 3

I'm allowed to lie on the web

Interaction: Entries that demonstrate my ability to interact with peers.

IF games, Jackie and I

Getting our feet wet. Comment on Jackie's blog.

Wikipedia Comparisons with Shellie

Depth: Links to an entry on my blog that shows my ability to write in depth.

No place like home

Wikipedia Edits

I don't want to have questions

IF games and my true feelings

Discussion: Links to a page on a classmate's blog where I left a significant comment that was part of a fruitful discussion.

My interactive fiction blog received some love.

Anne and Krug's Last Stand

My first contributions to Wikipedia have finally happened. I decided to edit my high school alumni, Pennsbury High School and the town of Ercolano.

On the Pennsbury page, I added a little section about the softball team. I was apart of the 2005 PIAA AAAA State Championship team. This athletic program has won more state titles than any other sport at the school. I then added more information about the district area. I added very detailed information. Within an hour, Alphageekpa, another contributor to this Wikipedia entry deleted my contribution:

Pennsbury is located in the southeastern corner of Pennsylvania, along the great bend of the Delaware River, lies Bucks County. In the extreme southeastern corner of Bucks County lie the four political subdivisions whose jointure for school purposes led to the formation of the Pennsbury School District. Yardley Borough is a typical small Bucks County municipality that has retained much of its early American charm and beauty. Lower Makefield Township is a predominately suburban residential area. The site of the major early expansion in the district was Falls Township. The Keystone Industrial Port Complex, all of the homes in Fairless Hills, and some of the homes in Levittown are in this township. The last of the four sections that make up the district is Tullytown Borough. This small borough was part of the Penn Manor Tract in the early 1700's.

I thought that this information was helpful to those about what boroughs and townships attend this high school; however, Alphageekpa didn't delete my information about softball. (I put this information back up on the page just to see if Alphageekpa would undo it again.)

My second Wikipedia edit was on my family's hometown in Italy, Ercolano. On this page, I added more geographical information about the town that my father and aunt helped me with.

It lies at the western foot of Mount Vesuvius, on the Gulf of Naples, just southeast of the city of Naples. The medieval town of Resina was built on the lava stream left by the eruption of Vesuvius (ad 79) that destroyed the ancient city of Herculaneum, from which the present name is derived. Ercolano is a resort and the starting point for excursions to the excavations of Herculaneum and for the ascent of Vesuvius by bus. The town also manufactures leather goods, buttons, glass, and the wine known as Lacrima Christi (Tears of Christ).

So far, no one has decided to undo my contribution. If someone decides that what I added isn't important or relevant and deletes it, I will let you know. 

I think professors and high school teachers shouldn't try avoiding Wikipedia. If anything doing an activity like this will prove to the students and their teachers how easy it is to change and edit information on Wikipedia. An activitiy like this will help emphasize the difference between what is a reliable source and what is an unreliable source. I am not saying that Wikipedia is completey unreliable, I am just saying that it is easy to change the information given. 

One of my previous articles about Wikipedia really emphasizes my feelings and views of this encyclopeida.

I, of course, looked at the article about softball being that I am a softball player here at SHU. Go Griffins!

SOFTBALL ARTICLE

Caution: You are not currently logged in. Editing this way will cause your IP address to be recorded publicly in this page's edit history. If you create an account, you can conceal your IP address and be provided with many other benefits. Messages sent to your IP can be viewed on your talk page.

What is better? Creating an account or editing without an account and have then record my IP address?

The page informed me that the page is 54 kilobytes long. Scrolling a little further down, I see a large text box that includes source codes, text and CSS codes that we were introduced to earlier in the semester.

I clicked on the discussion tab and was shown that "Softball was a good article nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There are suggestions below for improving the article. Once these are addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake."

In the good article criteria, it explains that it must be well-written, factually accurate and verifiable, broad, neutral, stable, and illustrated. (A softball is not white but lime-green.) So this article is satisfactory.

The history tab showed me the most recent edits to this particular article. The last one was October 29, 2008 at 6:58. This page describes the edit the user did to the article at the time. Quite interesting.

When comparing the Wikipedia entries for SHU and SVC, I noticed that SVC had more information than SHU. SVC included history and traditions while SHU had the basic information. Both entries were richly-linked to information that a person wouldn't know if they didn't attend the institution. Seton Hill's article talks a little about the athletic programs while Saint Vincent has no reference to their athletics at all. Saint Vincent's entry also includes tuition costs, number of undergraduates and graduates, and faculty. Seton Hill's entry doesn't include any of that information.

Both entries were last edited in 2007.With this information, it is understandable why SHU's entry lacks some needed information.

Wikipedia strives to build a consensus and explains that it is not a democracy and the governance can be inconsistent. Sounds like the USA government.

The policies and guidelines clearly explain that a user who acts against the spirit of our written policies may be reprimanded, even if technically no rule has been violated.

Contributors come from many different countries and cultures and have different views, we must treat others with respect to effectively build an encyclopedia. Articles contributed should be neutral and represent views fairly, proportionately and without bias. it seems as if contributors decide to overlook this policy and believe slandering people through Wikipedia is okay. Well, it's not.

I don't like how they state that you don't need to read any Wikipedia policies before contributing. i think that all users should click on an agreement before having the chance to better the encyclopedia.

In the five pillars, they explain that Wikipedia is not the place to insert personal opinions, experiences, or arguments. This is because Wikipedia has a neutral point of view in which they strive for articles that advocate no single point of view. Even though anyone can edit, anything you write can we edited and redistributed by the community.

They shouldn't even have a code of conduct because it seems that no one reads and abides by it. They state that they have no firm rules besides the pillars, but whatever you write will be preserved for posterity and to be bold with edits and contributions to the articles.

I think the Wiki creators need to rethink their policies and pillars.

There's no Wikipedia entry for 'moral responsibility'

By Andrew Orlowski

"So we come to the question of responsibility. We've promised to deal with the ethics of Wikipedia before, and it's no longer possible to ignore the elephant in the room, so we must."

Wikipedia is a phenomenal source of pop culture trivia it seems like with the amount of "trolls" lurking among the articles and biographies. "The blame goes here, the blame goes there- the blame goes anywhere, except Wikipedia itself."

I'm not trying to side with Wiki, but the blame should go to the ignorant people in the world who have nothing else to do with their lives but destroy others. Maybe instead of destroying other peoples lives, you should build your own damn life.

Is Wikipedia Becoming a Respectable Academic Source?

By Lisa Spiro

"Just because more researchers-including some prominent ones-are citing Wikipedia does not mean it's necessarily a valid source for academic papers. However, you can begin to see academic norms shifting as more scholars find useful information in Wikipedia and begin to cite it" (Spiro).

Scholary documents achieve trustworthiness through a social process to assure readers that the source they cited in their paper or journal satisfies the quality norms of the field. This is a sign that the academic norms are changing in some disciplines and are turning to Wikipedia for useful and trustworthy information.

In my personal experience, many of my professors have told my classes to stay away from Wikipedia because it is to unreliable. Spiro examines these four criticisms of Wikipedia.

They are:

1) Research papers and projects should'nt rely on encyclopedias. This is not the kind of thing you want to reference in an academic paper. Many enccylopedias are constantly changing so the information provided could either be old or invalid.

2) Wikipedia is constantly going through revisions. This is similar to the first one. Wiki is too unstable to cite. What you read today may be gone tomorrow or even in a few minutes.

3) You can't trust Wiki because anyone is able to contribute.

4) These entries lack authority because of the lack of peer review.

Wikipedia can be appropriate in an academic source depending on what is being cited and for what purpose. Wikipedia is instructive for its readers because of its openness. Spiro explains that "Wikipedia can be a legitamate source for student research papers- and furnish a way to teach research skills." If readers use critical judgment in analyzing its reliability and appropriateness for citation, then there should be no shame in citing it.

I know I have turned to Wikipedia to look up helpful information on the subject I am writing about. I won't necessarily cite the information gained from Wiki, but I will use it in a way that I am helping my scholarly research. If you know what I mean.

What is a very bad idea that usability professors call?
ASKING FOR TOO MUCH INFORMATION.

There are two different kinds of usability disasters, as Krug put its. There is the boss asking users for more information than what they really need and having more pizazz on the site.

It seems today that no matter what site you enter, they are always asking your for information or even just asking you to take a survey. How much personal information do the companies need? And are they using this information solely for them or are they selling it?

What once used to be a quick task has become a project. I wanted to subscribe to a Phillies newsletter and was bombarded with questions pertaining to my personal information.

Krug explains there are three downsides to companies asking for more information than what they know what to do with. (I also agree with these as well.)

When I see a site that is asking me for way too much information, I will lie to the site just so I can get what I want. Krug says that "as soon as people realize you're asking for more information than you need, they feel complety justified in lying to you" (182). So in turn, the companies get false information. In a way they sort of deserve. I'm allowed to lie to you then.

Also, the less data sites ask for, the more submissions the company will receive. People just don't have the time to fill out long forms.

And by asking users for too much information makes you not only look bad, but also needy I think. I look at it like if they are asking me for all of this information the company is either doing bad or they just don't know what they are doing.

Basically, when creating a site that requires users to fill out some personal information limit it to their name and e-mail address considering that is the most basic form of communication today.

"...successful Web pages are usually a delicate balance, and it's important to keep in mind that even a minor change can have a major impact. Sometimes the real challenge isn't fixing the problems you find - it's fixing them without breaking the parts that already work" (Krug 158).

When we ask people to test our websites, we should be aware that some problems that might find and have with the site may be harder to fix than we think. Let's say person X says that the page on subject Y doesn't make sense it is harder to navigate through and read. Well Y maybe connected to Z and to change Y would mean that we would have to redesign both pages.

"Whenever you're making changes, think carefully about what else is going to be affected. In particular, when you're making something more prominent than it was, consider what else might end up being de-emphasized as a result" (Krug 158).

When we decide to make changes in our papers, our IF games, our blog entries, our life, we consider what else may be affected as well. We must do this with our websites and especially with our writing for the web.

In order to have a great site, we have to test. Krug explains that usability testing is like have friends visiting from out of town. You make the tourist rounds with them, you see things about your home town that you usually don't notice because you're so used to them. You realizee that a lot of things that you take for granted aren't obvious to everybody.

No matter how many people you test, if they are the targeted audience or not, this user will always point out things you can do to improve your site because as the designer, you will oversee a link, a color, a font, a picture, etc that should either have more emphasis or be removed.

TEST, TEST, TEST!

In the beginning of Slouching Towards Bedlam the gamer is given a variety of choices. The gamer can chose to examine a desk blotter, a sandlewood box, a desk drawer, a phonograph with the sounds of a man, or a black box on wheels. It seems that there is a particular procedure that one must follow in the game. You have to "get your bearings". Then one has to investigate the situation and the surroundings and then you must act upon the situation at hand. 

When I came upon the phonograph, I pictured the tin cylinders as storage rather than "games". I didn't get that far into the game even though I played it for about an hour. I was able to examine the office, the lobby, some archives and rooms from the Panopticon.

In Cleve's archives, it explains that he has small burns on palms and inner forearms that should heal quickly. He is 23 and earlier in the game is suspected that he was a little crazy. Apparently, he was arrested for disturbing the peace. The doctors diagnosed him with disassociative disorder, acute schizophrenia with paranoid tendencies yet didn't seem harmful to himself or others.

That is as far as I could get in an hour. It took me forever to find out information about Cleve. I'm assuming that he will refuse to talk for the rest of his life. From what I understood from the game, Cleve is paranoid about something. Maybe he is paranoid about the future and time and how he is stuck in time. I don't know. I wish I could've gotten further in the game then what I did.

To go along with what Jackie wrote, the creator/author of this game did a wonderful job blending suspense, literature, time travel, and science-fiction into a game. I personally didn't enjoy this game as much as I thought I was because everyone in class said they enjoyed it; however, I don't really like IF games to begin with so I think I dislike every game I play.

"The result is that designers want to build sites that look great, and developers want to build sites with interesting, original, elegant features" (Krug 126).

The internet is in a continuous battle between art and commerce. The hype culture, as Krug explains, is focused on making promises no matter what they are in order to gain capital, users, partners, and revenue-generating deals to the site. This then lands all on the shoulders of the designers and the programmers to find a happy medium. Krug's chapter 8 basically describes the conflicts between web designers which is a great transition into the discussion, as well as our discussion in class, of usability testing. This will be incredibly helpful in our usability testing that is due the 27th.

We need to convey the big picture on the homepage so that the main subject/topic of the site is clearly stated. Krug explains that "the Home page is the waterfront property of the Web: It's the most desirable real estate, and there's very limited supply.  Everybody who has a stake in the site wants a promo or a link to their section...and the turf battles for Home page visibility can be fierce." (97) 

A typical user will normally scroll/scan down the page until they find an interesting link, this link should be relevant to the idea of the sites focus. If something is unclear to the user, it might be possible that the user will misinterpret something and/or get frustrated.

Basically, it is as easy as this: "Don't get me wrong: Everything else is important. You do need to impress me, entice me, direct me, and expose me to your deals" (Krug 99). But in order to accomplish all of these, we need to create a clear homepage to get the message across whether it is through a welcome blurb or a tagline, the idea needs to be AVAILABLE.

Krug, Intro-Ch. 3

"I should be able to 'get it'- what it is and how to use it- without expending any effort thinking about it" (Krug 11).

This is exactly what we did Friday when we critiqued our peers' websites. We gaver our opinions on whether the site was easy or if we understood the topic without using to much effort thinking about it. We need to be aware that a person of average (or even below average) ability and experience will visit our sites. As website creators, we need to make sure that something works not just okay or good, but WELL so that our visitors will not get frustrated.

"If something requires a large investment of time-or looks like it will- it's less likely to be used" (Krug 6).

Don't we do this when we have to read a book whether it's instructional, like this one, or for academia. The book is 300 or more pages and we dread reading it. Reading this book will require a huge amount of time. We will most likely store it in a book shelf or in a desk and forget about. We want to make sure we do this with our sites. Like some of our peers' websites, some included lengthy paragraphs. These long paragraphs are most likely not going to be read because that means the reader will have to invest time. That is why we are told to use bulleted lists that contain the most helpful and useful information.

"When you're creating a site, your job is to get rid of the question marks" (Krug 13).

Keep the site self-evident so that the pages are effective.

Like Kilian explained, we don't read pages; we scan them. As website visitors, we are normally in a hurry and we don't want to read EVERYTHING. This is the basic mindset of a web surfer. So we need to address these needs.

A main idea that is examined in both Krug and Kilian's books is the idea of visual hierarchy.
We must make sure that the most important items are higher on the page. This will help the reader understand the main topic or idea of the site.

Krug explains that we need to make it obvious what's clickable (37). This was an issue on the site that Jackie and I created. Many of our peers said that the pictures linking back to the homepage wasn't obvious. So we made sure that we fixed that problem. We don't want visitors questioning our site.

As part of our assignment, both Jackie and I have explored Interactive Fiction (IF) in depth.

Here is our website we created:

Jackie and Denamarie's Interactive Fiction Website

So as a child I never played video games. I wasn't one to sit in front of a TV for endless hours. I was the child that was constantly outside playing football with the boys. So not only are video games unfamiliar to me, IF games are worse. I just don't like playing video games. But as an assignment, I forced myself to play these games. I thought these games were hard. I don't know if it was because I didn't understand the concepts or if I just couldn't properly tell the game what to do.

So I first played, Lost Pig. I must say that this was a favorite of mine mainly because it was easier than the other ones. It seemed like an appropriate introduction to the world of Interactive Fiction games. I never caught the pig, but it was fun trying to find it. I loved the southern type of language Grunk had; it was cute.

I then tried Ecdysis. This game was easier to play because ot the links that limited my input in the game. This game seemed like hypertext fiction. I got to the end of the "game" just by clicking on the links.

• (Do gamers always have to create such gruesome games?)
  

The Tales of the Traveling Swordsman was a little more interesting than the previous two. I liked the story of the pendant. The imagery in the story was great. For example it says:

"On a worn path...
Your journey brings you north, through acres of grassland, into a sparsley wooded area, along a narrow stream for a short ways, and eventually across an overgrown path. It meanders forward, so you follow it for awhile. The path begins to show signs of recent use, and it widens some. It turns briefly, angles through outcroppings of rock, and soon runs straight eastward, like a channel between decrepit fences to the north and south."

Galatea seemed like a conversation with a woman than a game.It was hard afte awhile to think of questions to ask. Every question I put in would say that they didn't understand. But besides that, this game is a great example on how to interact withe the game in the form of dialogue rather than saying commands like walk west.

Finally, Photopia. This game frustrated me. I just didn't like this game at all. I felt like all I was doing was examining items and objects. This seemed like to much of a story to be a game. How did I go from two guys running through a red light to the red planet? WEIRD! I feel like this game was scattered.

>go to the bathroom                    
>Nothing like that seems to be around. 

Our main text throughout this part of our internet education has been Writing for the Web 3.0 by Crawford Kilian. This book was a good read. Even though some subjects were a review, other sections were helpful. Kilian’s book reminded me of first semester, freshman year in Dr. Jerz’s News Writing class with the style guides, the overview of active and passive verbs, the eliminating of excess words, etc.

Writing for the Web 3.0 was easy to read with Kilian’s professionally yet friendly writing style. This is the first time I’m actually writing for the internet; well, if you count my blog then I have been doing it since 2005. So, you can classify me as a newbie. With the help of this book, the repetition, the easy tips, and the exercises not only brought me to a starter level, it helped me understand the significance of publishing certain material on the web. There are too many books that explain rules and ignore exercises to help the readers practice what you preached. people explain the rules of grammar without giving you practice exercising those rules. I thought there were decent amounts, yet, I would like to see more used in a technology format, considering, we are writing for the web. Kilian is publishing a newer version of this book; I know this because he has been in contact with Dr. Jerz. I have some suggestions that might help him. The main idea about his book was the overall simplicity of the text. He put the technological lingo into lists and tips that were easy for us “newbies” to understand. Another think I enjoyed was the repetition within the book. He would refer to an idea he wrote three chapters back.

For the most part, I really can’t think of anything that I would change. I know grammar rules, punctuation and other writing ideas were expressed and I thought were basic, but for a new reader, like freshmen in college, who hardly knows any of these grammatical and punctuation rules, they will be helpful. I think this was an effective book. The explanations were thorough and in depth and the language was professional yet informal, a great way to grab the reader’s attention.

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Blogs on Kilian's book:

Can I Persuade You?
A Little Bit of Everything
No More Than 2
A Gladitorial Fight with Rubber Crutches
When in doubt, just ask Kilian.... or Andy Lonigro
Follow the Pattern

Coverage:
Follow the Pattern is an entry where I talk about reading patterns of web surfers.
A Gladiatorial Fight with Rubber Crutches is a blog about editing with some style guide tips.
When in doubt, just ask Kilian...or Andy Lonigro is a blog entry about the rules to writing for the internet.
No More Than 2 an entry on corporate websites and how many people should be working on them.
A Little Bit of Everything - the different types of blogs.
Part One of Electronic Literature
Time for an Investigation - part two of Electronic Literature
It's All About the Feet is an entry about The Body
By: Denamarie To: Kilian - Kilian Critique

Timeliness:
Follow the Pattern
Is it an election or an auction?
A Little Bit of Everything
Can I Persuade You?
Wow, that was annoying is a blog about the hypertext The Heist

Interaction:
Andy's Blender Blog
Jackie's Consumer Power blog

Depth:
The University of the Yellow Wallpaper
Time for an Investigation is a blog that looks deeper into the hypertext Cruising.
An in depth blog about The Body, mainly about her views on her feet.
Everybody's Free to Wear Sunscreen is a blog about my close reading of Cruising.

Discussion:
Chelsea's Not a girl - Not yet a woman was relatively close to my ideas on Jackson's The Body

Part Three: Synthesize Cruising in a richly-linked blog essay.

Aristotle's conception of plot explains that there is a beginning, middle, and an end. Aristotle concludes that "a well-constructed Plot, therefore, cannot either begin or end at any point one likes; beginning and end in it must be of the forms just described." He believes to say something is beautiful, whether animate or inanimate, they must not only present a certain order but also be of a certain magnitude. Hypertext breaks this idea of order and structure because it tests the ideas of a fixed sequence, a definite beginning and ending, a story's definite magnitude and the conception of unity or wholeness.

A book or story should not have a set of directions, but with hypertext stories there maybe some instructions. Ingrid Ankerson and Megan Sapnar provide instructions for their hypertext story Cruising. : To hear the sound, turn on the computer's speakers or plug in headphones. Move the cursor up and down to control the size of the piece, left and right to control the scrolling speed of the text and images. This goes against all of Aristotle's ideas of plot. Even though the story may be recited in order, the text is in order as well as the pictures, the idea of unity or wholeness is tempted with the struggle to coincide the sound, the text and the images. 

Cruising requires the reader to learn how to “drive” the text because it is flash based poem with the help of cinematic effects. When the text on the screen and the spoken words are made to coincide, the rush of the image sequence is reduced to a slow ongoing loop of still frames. The viewer moves between reading text and experiencing a filmic flow of images — but cannot exactly have both at the same time. This idea was strategically thought of by the authors so they could manipulate the readers to highlight the materiality of text, film, and interface separately. Every detail used in this story has a way of grabbing the reader's attention and bringing them in. Through the use of words, images, and sound, people are captured.

The main image on the site of Cruising is a car in black and white with text reading, "We wanted love." The overall idea of the story was a group of girls cruising through their small town looking for love, just like the rest of the teenagers in the town. They never fully grasped the idea that love was found in the empty parking lots in one another's company. Carefully reading the flowing text it says, "We wanted love. That's all any body ever wanted. We thought maybe we could find it driving past us." The irony in these sentences is that love was right in front of them. They were small town girls, who believed that they were alone in the world. They took a drive in a station wagon going hoping to find love that would fill their hearts and soul. They had each other and that is all they really needed in the world, their friends.

Ankerson writes,” the night rolling in Mary Jo's father's station wagon like movie credits." They cruised through town all night trying to discover something that would bring electricity into their lives. They would end up in parking lots where they would all "really get to know each other." The small town atmosphere used within this 2 minute recitation elucidates the idea that they were able to "get to know each other" while spending idle nights doing nothing but talking of their dreams they hoped to fulfill after leaving this small town. Ankerson describes how there "were hundreds of us tracing the edge of the small town of Wisconsin, eyeing life through a car we couldn't yet take to the world." Here a vast amount of information is given. They were teenagers, very young adults who weren't ready to go into the real world. The world was seen from inside cars on the borders of the counties. They knew they couldn't grasp the idea of reality, but the thought of one day being in that reality was mystifying.

The racing up and down Main Street looking to make connections with the other teens with the same dreams and aspirations of finding love is really how life is. We all reach that time in our life where we are hesitant to leave a place so safe, where you feel secure.  When they were "cruising" they were traveling about without a particular purpose or destination. Even though they said they were looking for love, they didn't need to. The car cruising was a time where they drove through town reliving memories and moments they shared with their closest friends, days when they were care free and innocent.. The girls in the car were enjoying life, spending time with one another, being teenagers in a small town in Mary Jo's father's station wagon. They weren't in a rush to grow up; they just wanted what every teenager wants, love and freedom. They hoped that as they drove, or cruised, aimlessly in their small town they would find it. They wanted freedom and love and they traced the edge of it in cars peering out of car windows.

This flash poem seems to be a flash to the past, where a woman relives the days of carelessness and love of friends and life. The story ends with the phrase, "we couldn't yet take to the world." I read this as they weren't ready to live in the real world and that the realization that once they leave this small town, they will never get it back. The tracing of the small town of Wisconsin is a way to express their hesitation of leaving their safety net.

This story reminds me of Baz Luhrman's Everybody's Free.

Part Two: Looking a little closer at Cruising.

This poem on the go is an oral recitation of a teenager's favorite pastime in Wisconsin. Cruising is a flash based poem with cinematic elements marked by a flow of images accompanied with the text. As I wrote in my other blog, the idea of the text is for the reader to interact with the text. One must first struggle with controlling the speed and the direction of the narrative before closely examining this work.

Cruising is a personal poem about her life in a small town in Wisconsin. As I listened to the recitation again, I could hear the passion in the narrator's voice. After hearing the story again, I turned off the sound and just let the text flow on the screen at a decent speed where I could read word for word. By doing this, I really got to know the text by examining the rhetoric. I then just watched the images fly across my laptop screen where black and white images of a car, a subway train, a girl applying lipstick and a movie theater sign represent the young girl's small town. The images and text seem so stereotypical of a small town girl. This reminds me Journey's song, Don't Stop Believing.They are just small town girls, living in a lonely world who took a station wagon going anywhere. They feel they are lonely, but they have each other, and that is all you really need in this huge world.

The title Cruising is significant because the verb cruise means to travel about without a particular purpose or destination. They girls in the car were enjoying life, spending time with one another, being teenagers in a small town in Mary Jo's father's station wagon. They weren't in a rush to grow up, they just wanted what every teenager wants, love. They hoped that as they drove, or cruised, aimlessly in their small town where they never every crack and bump they would find it. The funny thing is that it is right in front of them, they just can't see it. Love is their friends, their small town, their family, the late nights cruising in town. Don't we all want love?

Have you ever spent a night cruising around town hoping to find something or someone, a change of something so ordinary? I know I have. I have been one of those girls in the back of a car, starring out the window dreaming of life and love and wondering where they are. 

Cruising was my favorite electronic text. Not only is it text creatively arranged with pictures, it is also an oral recitation of a teenager's favorite pastime in small town Wisconsin. The idea of the text is for the reader to interact with the text. One must first struggle with controlling the speed, the direction of the narrative. It was invigorating to see when the text kept up with the sound, the images appear that coincide with the story. One can move from reading the text, to watching the images, to hearing the young woman recite her story. I love this story because it sounds like something I would have written.

The Cape was another story I read. Even though there were very few words, the images were appealing. They were different views, geographical images of Cape Cod. There were eight images to click on and each image had up to 5 sentences. As you moved your mouse over the image, a quick sentence summarized what the page was about.
1- My grandmother Carpenter lived on Cape Cod.
2- We only ever went to visit her once.
3- These events happened a long time ago.
4- My Uncle did not know how to talk to a kid.
5- We practiced whistling behind the glacial erratic.
6- Sounds carry, especially in the winter.
7- What a boring story. I never learned to whistle.
8- If I had a photograph I would insert it here.

The author prepares us from the beginning saying don't believe everything you read. The interesting thing about this story is that you could start at any image and the story would still make sense.

I, You, We was an odd but very original. As a reader, we are inside of some sort of enclosed space where we can rotate around and never return to the same point. The reader makes up their own story by clicking, dragging or just waiting for the screen to move where you see the pronouns I, you and we along with verbs. With every move you get a format of either I VERB You VERB We VERB or any order of I, you or we. You make up a sort of story by doing this. There is only one pronoun of I so you could assume the basis of the story is of the reader, the I.

The Dreamlife of Letters - Cool. Surprisingly, I didn't have to click anything this time. The poem was in a video from. It is more of a presentation than an interaction. The movement of the letters was very unpredictable and it kept me interested. You just have to see for yourself.

Body image is a very touchy subject when it comes to women of all ages. Everyone desires to have the perfect body, but no one accepts the body they have now. In Shelley Jackson's "The Body," she accepts her body, even if she has flaws, through her discovering her own body. She doesn't compare her body to the models and actresses that teenage girls are so often told to emulate. Our bodies are unique. It should be kept that way. Jackson's overall purpose for this story is to prove to the audience that image shouldn't matter. How you carry yourself and your self-confidence is what will make you attractive.

So reading about her body features, I was struck by the link about her feet.

"Feet are alien, like a hoof or a wing. They are more like tools or furniture than like flesh, they are so sturdy and well-crafted and so serviceable. Maybe they are a little too far away from the heart to befriend, though at one time I could put my big toe in my mouth, and I aspire to do it again, though without much hope."

Jackson doesn't refer to her feet as another body part, but she looks to her feet as a tool, well-crafted and serviceable. Without our feet, we wouldn't be able to walk. Well, okay, if we had our arms, we could technically walk with our hands, but anyway. She writes,  "My strong feelings about feet have lessened in intensity as I have put distance between myself and them." I think this line is brilliant. She is telling us through this one sentence, that as she aged, she also grew in height allowing for her to be further away from her feet that she depends on to walk. She explained earlier that feet are alien, they are more like tools than flesh. Can't we look at our arms, legs, mouth, and eyes as tools as well?

A side note:
When she writes about her feet nestling one another under sheets, I was like OH MY GOD! I do that every night. It is the only way that I can fall asleep.
"My feet rub each other under the covers at night or while I'm reading, sliding sensuously on each other. The ball of the big toe screws into the arch of the other foot, the toes fraternize, side slides by side. The pace steps up when I'm excited, the foot cranking around the ankle joint in slow circles, toes spreading and then squeezing together: a whole waltz under the covers, very comforting and secret and like company, like two small dachshunds rolling on each other."

Okay back to the close reading.

Jackson talks about how she has hairy feet and how a girlfriend was opposed to all body hair. Even with her girlfriends comments, she still looked at her feet as cute. The way she flashbacks to her childhood on most of her body parts, really emphasizes the idea that through the years, she has grown to accept her body more and more.

"I have a few glinting hairs on the tops of my feet and a little tuft on each toe. When I was nine I read that hobbits had hairy feet and went around barefoot, and that was enough to persuade me that hairy feet were good. Much later a girlfriend firmly opposed to almost all kinds of body hair persuaded me to try shaving my feet, but stubble on my toes seemed so ludicrous that I gave it up forthwith. Besides, I still felt that my hairy toes were cute."

Jackson had a willingness of being open that may help other women having constant body image problems know and understand that everyone's body is imperfect, and that's the beauty of a body. The author was not always happy with the her figure, but as she embraced her body, she embraced a new level of self-confidence that every woman wants.

Disorientated, confused, annoying, and stupid are a few adjectives that describe my feelings about this hypertext story, The University of the Yellow Wallpaper. Why do people make these types of stories? Don't they realize that readers aren't going to sit at a computer screen and click on every link and read every word?

Okay, so now that I got my feelings out of the way, I will look a little closer at this dreadful reading. Throughout the story, the author makes several references to her childhood. She also includes an image of a child there is an image of a child from the waist up. where she explains through one of her links that it is "not a realistic representation, a related copy, an idea such as we might get from figurative painting; it is a scene made up by blocks of meaning, at once varied, repeated, and discontinuous".

It seems that she is not very confident in herself for she explains that she " will have become the post-graduate, who by sheer terror, boredom, anger, frustration, melancholy, or witty intelligence, decided to terminate my indefinite subscription to higher learning; I will opt to drop out of the University of Yellow Wallpaper, owing to the fact that the voices have strongly suggested I cease listening to the anterior voices, who whisper, "you are an infantile wish fulfillment..." She describes voices telling her to give up. Who are these voices? Is she crazy? Is The University of the Yellow Wallpaper an insane asylum. She indicates that the university is on the hills near an insane asylum, but never says that she is admitted into it.

Her professor told her class about the idea of "existential 'nothingness,' as simply to be and not to be, expressing the fact that nonbeing is an inseparable part of being, grasping what it means to exist, I need to grasp the fact that I might not exist, that I tread at every moment on the sharp edge of possible annihilation and can never escape the fact that death will arrive at some unknown moment in the future (but I always knew this)!" She seems very gloomy and depressed.

As I clicked along with the text, I came across a passage that goes a little in detail about her childhood and how she has felt.

"...you used to say to me that I am a great young girl, and though you left me here to perish, though you put beneath my feet a great howling pit of emptiness, the words that lie at the bottom of my soul leap forth and they light the shadows below me; I am the one who was lost in the crowd, whom the fizzing lights made dizzy, a subaltern who saw everything about her reduced to absurdity, for if I were truly a great young girl the specters would cease bellowing; I was a young child with a body and soul, I had a heart that was not protected by a steel vault, and when I had moments of ecstasy I would sing with burning sparks"

The young girl, or woman, however old she may be, is very unforgiving of her parent(s) actions when she was little. She was empty. She was a young girl with a body, soul, and emotions whose heart was unprotected by her parent(s).

Us as a reader you get an inside glimpse of her childhood.The young woman seemed as if she didn't want her mother to leave because she knew that she was being sent away to The University of Yellow Wallpaper, where one can only assume, is most likely some sort of psychiatric ward where she could recover. But what causes her to become psychotic? Was it her family, the voices in her head that she still hear? To me, it seems that her childhood is what caused her to be so disoriented and confused.

As Maddie writes, "White displays in this excerpt the age old dilemma of a child facing the great troubles of adulthood and the adult that still wished the inner child time to play. The continuing sentences, though correct, reflect both the continuity of time as well as the child-like desire to pour something out that either excites or sorrows in one mad long rush."

Don't we all feel like that? We wish to stay young forever and avoid the trials and tribulations that adulthood has awaiting for us. I know I do. =]

Here are my exercises 4 and 5 from Writing for the Web 3.0.
These exercises were actually very helpful.

exercise 4.1.doc

exercise 4.3.doc

"The Heist" by Walter Sorrells was a sight for sore eyes.

Not knowing to expect from this novel, I opened the site and saw links. I clicked on one of those links that brought me to a page with more links, and those links brought me to another page of even more links. Ughh... never again will I read a hypertext novel in my life.

I didn't know where to begin. Should I read the first page first then go back to the links? Should I read it and click on the links as I get to them and so on and so on with the other pages filled with links?

Well, I read the first page in its entirety and I felt bombarded with links. This hypertext novel reminded me of my elementary school days when the class went to the library and I ran over to the section that had the choose-your-own-ending story.

On every page, there was another story waiting to be read by me. By following some of the links, it made my concentration of the novel as a whole incredibly hard. All I want to know is what happened at the end of the overall story. While I was taking in the information from the other links, I forgot what I just read earlier. I feel like there were too many different sub-plots in this novel.

Conclusion: This hypertext novel is a complete overload of information and sub-plots. I felt like I was trying to catch a frog but he kept jumping to different locations.

My feelings: I hated it.

"Yet manipulating readers by appealing to their fears and insecurities is deeply disrespectful. If you're attempting to persuade your readers, it should be on the basis of appeals to their intelligence and maturity."
-Writing for the Web 3.0

Three Elements of Persuasion:
1- Logical Argument
    Stating a proposition of some kind with supporting reasons.
2- Emotional Appeal
    Invoking ideas and images that stir our readers' feelings, we can gain attention that logical argument alone may not achieve. You may find that facts, not loaded language, can inspired emotions in the readers.
3- Credibility
    Using the readers' language and registers they are comfortable with can strongly enhance your credibility. Make sure to demonstrate a shared interest between you and your readers and convey sincerity through your tone and evident desire to help readers view your site.

Kilian says to make sure you write in the language your readers will understand; however, I sometimes visit a site that I don't really understand what they are saying. It is hard to make sure that anyone that comes to your site will understand you completely. The vistiors that will come the most will either know about you or your ideas and will repeatedly come back for more. But for those visitors that came to the site on a whim, they may become lost in the language that is normal to the regulars of the site.