Week of 4 Sep 2006
Par 1 Revision
Online at Turnitin.com, submit a thorough revision of your Par 1 draft. Due 15 min before class is scheduled to start.
Form: Is it a single paragraph of about 200 words, developing a single idea that presents what you think of when you hear the term "college writing"? (4pts)
Focus: Is the writing concise and focused, with no excess words or sentences, and no digressions or unnecessary details? (4pts)
- Voice: Do I get a sense of who you are as a person, as a writer, and as a student in this class? (4pts)Revision: Does the revision make use of the comments I made on your rough draft, and does it demonstrate your careful efforts to apply those comments to prevent similar problems from appearing in this draft? (4pts)
would if we dont have anyone that reviewed our paragraph? should we just try and revise it ?
Yes, you should still be able to revise usefully based on my comments.
I checked, and I see that at least one student has already reviewed your paragraph.
I understand we have to turn in our revised paragraph 1, but noone has revised mine that i am aware of...should i just try to revise it myself?
Harrison, check the e-mail that I sent out to MWF students a few hours ago.
The only email i got was the one about the due dates for friday and monday, but i didnt receive anyones paragraph to revise, and im not aware that anyone has revised mine.
This is for the MWF students only:
You wouldn't have received that information by e-mail, it should all be in Turnitin.com.
I set up the MWF section the same way I set up the TuTh class, and I know the TuTh section is working fine. Unfortunately, I can't log in as a student and see what a student sees, so I won't be able to debug this one remotely.
If the peer review function isn't working today, we'll just have to troubleshoot it on Monday. I have already given feedback on Par 1 to everyone who's already submitted it, so everyone will at least have my feedback when you revise your paragraph to submit on Monday.
I am really confused about all of these due dates. I revised the paragraphs that were on turnitin.com, but I don't know how to get the paragraph of mine that was revised by someone else. I really don't understand this website. It says that something is overdue but last time I looked, there wasn't even anything else on the site.
Thanks for your note, Shannon. The way Turnitin.com works, I have to wait until after the deadline for the peer review exercise has passed before I can send your peers' comments on to you, so I'll have to ask you to be a bit patient.
The next time were in class, I'll be happy to answer any questions about the site.
Don't worry, we'll sort it all out before long.
I was wondering if it's alright that my revision of paragraph one is really different from the original...I tried to keep it close but they ended up being different.
Absolutely, Shannon! The point of a revision is to make a better paragraph. Even if I make a specific suggestion about a specific sentence, if you end up deciding you should cut the whole sentence in order to improve the whole paragraph, great.
Of course, you need to take extra care to proofread all the new sentences you write, and check them for wordiness, staying on topic, etc. But yes, if you feel compelled to make major changes, by all means, please do!
I'm looking forward to reading your revision.