After reading the example that Dr. Jerz posted on our News Writing website, I thought that I am doing pretty good on my articles.
Listed below is the example and my explanation:
Assistant News Editor, Anne O'Nymous read the article.
- Is this really necessary? Would you agree that we could have put this at the bottom or as a closer?
- I think we could have left the first part out and started with the quote.
- Who is stating this? Is the editor telling us this? And also how is "obituaries" spelled? Obituaries? Obituarie's? or Obituary?
- I don't think we need to say "In a telephone call." I would have said, "Marian Paroo, Head Librarian, discussed Inkworthy's contributions in a telephone call."
- Bill Jones, freshman (where? What school?), said "Here is a quote."