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March 22, 2006

Colon Cleansing: Ch. 3-Truss

I guess the papers really are trying to be more effiicient and convenient, but I think that they are just getting lazy. Like everyone else in society, anyone who works with the media feels rushed. They were simply trying to make things easier for the laptop-toting, coffee-swigging people who think they have lives. Anyhow, as always, Truss has a reason to be annoyed. Because of this "colon cleansing," I believe that students and people already in the work force probably still have no idea how to use them. I may not always get it right, but if it allows me to cram more words into a sentence, I'm using it! Truss has cleared it for me, sort of.

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Original Sonnet

The air hangs heavy like a cloak over town
The smells and sounds of summer are now here
Barbequeing, children playing outside
Men on motorcycles taking a ride
Women in gardens, happy to work hard
Carnivals, parades, lots of excitement,
a celebration of life for us all
We can only hope this time will go slow
but like all good things, it must come to end.
The wind starts to blow and sun sets early
Leaves begin to fade away so quickly
And children will get the “back-to-school blues.”
Parents rejoice but hate raking the leaves
Anxiously we await the next summer.

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March 19, 2006

Comma Addicts, unite!

We seem to all have trouble with commas as a whole. It seems to be like an A.A. group where we need to learn that moderation is the key in beverages and commas alike. I have so much to blab about that I feel it best to get the main points out in the beginning, while people are still listening. In my Effective Speeh class at good old WCCC, we learned it's important to get the main points out right away. Truss does a great job in demonstrating the right ways of using commas and truly shows comma-phobes and comma-fiends a way to know moderation. Mike brought up a great point that if you say it aloud and pause, then that's where the comma should go. If Truss would've said it all that way, there wouldn't even need to be a chapter 2. Thanks, Mike. Comma-fiends should follow your example.

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Here are the Noted Changes on the Critical Essay:

I bulked up my thesis simply from discussing similarities between Eve and Cleo, but I also compared Antony and Adam with evidence of their great differences and similarities. My claim was that the snakes were what Cleo and Eve alike, which was just not good enough. There was too much discussion of asps already, so I focused my claim more on the principal of women using their bodies for power as well as their minds. The data I collected was from a bigger variety of sources such as Holland, Frost, Cicero, and old Plutarch. I really enjoyed the stupid movie quote, so try not to knock it too much for its cheesiness. I used a good counter-warrant by stating that Antony was unlike Adam in the way that he was a party-guy even before his woman. I also used the what the Clown in the play said about Cleopatra to bring home the point that Cleopatra was seen as evil. I really tried to make many more connections and show more evidence of my warrant and counter-warrant in this version.

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Changes in critical essay

From the books of Genesis 1-3, “God created man in his own likeness,” whereas women such as Eve (and in this instance, Cleopatra), were disobedient and led men into temptation. Cleopatra, as a seductress and a manipulator, put Antony under her spell and like Eve, she died by means of a serpent (Witcombe 2).
Cleopatra shows striking similar characteristics of Eve throughout the text as well as Antony, who falls in love with her and gives up his life because of her. The snake or “asp” killed her just as the serpent killed Eve whereas Adam, following a female down the path of destruction just as Antony did in Shakespeare’s Antony and Cleopatra.
"The plethora of accounts is confusing but the consistent presence of the serpent, an age-old symbol of healing as well as of evil, has ensured popular preference for this most powerful version. The Clown even says a woman is "a dish for the gods, if the devil dress her not.” (Levin?) The dress part of this may sound like Yoda-talk, but the general idea of Eve and Cleopatra’s similarities has been debated on several occasions without quite saying it. This establishes that indeed the serpent was a symbol and Eve seduced Adam in the way that the Clown speaks for Antony saying basically that Cleopatra is an evil temptress.
On the other hand, Antony had many faults of his own before he even began an affair with Cleopatra.
“If you believe Plutarch, Antony was simple, generous and easygoing, though a bit of a slob. Cicero says his orgies made him "odious," and there's a story that, after an all-night party, he rose to give a speech and threw up into the skirt of his toga while a kindly friend held it for him. Still, he was doing all right until Cleopatra came along, when he was, as Dryden laments, ‘unbent, unsinewed, made a woman's toy.’ ” This shows that Antony had been into “fishing” and “drinking” (Antony and Cleopatra) long before he had met her. Then again, he wasn’t known for being into adultery until her married Octavia and began a torrid affair with Cleopatra (Holland 6).
Money is said to be the root of all evil and a great source of power. In this case, isn’t lust used to establish power? Cleopatra used her body even to seduce Julius Caesar from the beginning when she first had herself shipped in a package of bedding to him. Historian Will Durant once wrote it wasn’t impossible that “she whispered to him the pleasant thoughts of making himself king, marrying her, and uniting the Mediterranean under one bed.” (Frost 2).
It seems that Cleopatra did what many women do daily, but on a larger scale. She wanted to marry for security, peace, and wealth which may not be far from what some women are doing in the present. There was also more to the seduction than just the sexual nature as well. Like Adam and Eve, they were in lust, but they also did “everyday things” that may have contributed to their attraction as well. They had some similar hobbies, unlike Antony and Octavia, his wife.
“She drank and gambled and hunted and fished with him. Sometimes they dressed as servants and roamed the town teasing the natives. “Anyone was buried in delicacies who stood by their kitchen door according to Frost because of Antony demanded a fresh banquet after each round of drinks (Frost 6). Besides their camaraderie, they had similar minds when it came to politics. Plutarch noted her as scholarly, spoke several languages, and was “lustful” in his two versions of her biography. He did find that she was a highly educated queen. Even Cicero, who detested her, admits she was literary and historian Al-Masudi said she was well-versed in sciences and philosophy (Frost 3). Although Cleopatra is like Eve in the way of lust, she is different in the way that she had a greater interest in politics. Yet, both Eve and Cleopatra are both intelligent in the ways that their feminine power was strong enough to steer their men off course.
Of course, as Adam was influenced, so was Antony. Cleopatra felt that Antony should have final responsibility of decision-making and that with a Greek-Roman influence; she could be a co-ruler (Holland 7). Eve wanted to exert power as well and urged Adam to eat the apple. Antony took a defeat instead of an apple for her. Like Eve again, Cleopatra had deserted him at a moment when he needed her most. If she and Eve would have stood by their lovers, perhaps this may not have happened.
Plutarch takes away some of this feeling of similarity when he suggests that the story of the asps may have been a rumor. He said she carried poison in a hollow comb and that there was no poison found on her body according to medical records or an asp seen within the monument (Holland 7).
Then again, Antony still followed her seduction by waging a war in the first place and living a corrupt life. Like Adam, he died with more honor than Eve because although he was a willing participant, he was also simply following the actions of his lover.
Overall, power can be attained on many levels, but women who have the power of seduction are just as able to survive as the men with political power.
“The men may be the head of the house but the women are the neck and they can turn the head anyway they want,” according to a character in “My Big Fat Greek Wedding.” As cheesy as it is to quote movies, it seems to be fitting when best trying to describe the correlation between women and the true amount of power they have over men simply for being how women were since “creation.”

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March 14, 2006

Blank Verse Entry

O, Dr. J! I've blogged late, so sorry!
The rhythm is hard to find but I'll try.
Here goes, no one knows quite how to phrase things.
Shakespeare was a man to love and loathe so,
for what he's put us through I loathe him now.
This is like pulling teeth from a small kid.
I've forgotten how to write a sonnet,
I'm ashamed to say, so please forgive me.
So how am I doing so far Dr.?
May I have some points for at least trying?
I know I'm whining, but how'd I do?
I'd give me some points if I were like you.
Thanks for your patience I'm finally done.

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Americans can't even speak proper English, so why should we expect foreigners to?

Oh, my! This chapter reminded me of how anal English majors need to become. I actually started proofreading my blogs and realize that although I'm absolutely incoherent as far as my spelling and grammar go, everyone else makes the same mistakes and seems to be able to understand my points anyway. I loved the fact that she attacked a very boring topic in a way that made me want to keep reading. After reading Kevin's blog, I can actually picture the USPP in bright orange vests and whistles barreling into SHU and beating us with their clubs for making the terrible mistakes we do. Sadly, I think it might be the only thing that would work. We have the kind of people who wear shirts that say "Welcome to America, speak English" who think they're clever. What we really need in this country is a policy where idiots shouldn't be put in positions of authority. I'll get off of my soap box and just say that this was quite refreshing and I "look forwerd 2 corecting my punt'ation n grammer 'stakes."

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March 08, 2006

I Heart You

I love the different meanings of "heart" Hall used in her opposing view of the previous article. To the Romans it was about courage in battle and to the Egyptians it meant affection. The cultures overlapped into marriage as another meaning for "heart" and I enjoyed how she described Enobarbus' views as well as Cleo's servant's feeling about her husbands "imaginary nose." She kind of brings up the cheesiness of the whole relationship between Antony and Cleopatra so this was much more refreshing than just reading about politics and she is sure to point out that Antony "hearts" Cleo in the way that he says that Cleo is his "conqueror." Aw, isn't that special?

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Lucky Duck: Bowers article

Antony, you are the weakest link. Caesar, you are the lucky duck. This article to an interesting angle in an already overdone discussion of the politics in Antony and Cleopatra. The author explains that Caesar "holds all the cards" even though he acts like he is allowing Antony and Cleo some leeway, he keeps them under his thumb by marrying Antony to his sister in what looks like his attempt of keeping the peace (even though he knows that Antony will screw up with Cleo)and makes Cleo think if she sells out Antony she will have some power of her own. This is very sexual like the author said. I couldn't help but think of the triumvirate in a phallic way (Antony might have had one of his testicles for a minute and Cleo put them in her purse and Caesar was just one big sex organ.). Overall, Caesar ended up getting what he wanted even though Antony and Cleo put up a good fight. Caesar also managed to bring the Pax Romana to life, so it pays to be the bad guy. I'm starting to believe that nice guys really do finish last, but in the end they do get the girl.

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