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I want to write an article pertaining to Greensburg residents, how they are affected by being excluded from Homecoming. I will interview past graduate students and residents of the community. Get opinions from both sides, positive and negative. My back up story will consist of the tradition of homecoming, if SHU follows the protocols and guidelines from previous homecomings.
Articles of True Crime
I chose to pick the two articles pertaining to the incident at Delaware State and a
crime story from Spain.
The first story happened on Friday morning as a gunman shot two students who
were seriously wounded. The next story took place in Spain, a 58 year old man stabbed
his ex-wife.
The Delaware shooting, police identified a suspect as “persons of interest” were
questioned.
The story from Spain, the man who had stabbed his wife was taken to the
Fontcalent prison in Alicante to await trial.
According to the layout of the judicial system, the two stories I chose only made it
to the entrance. Reported and observed crime, the two articles made it into print, so the
crimes were obviously observed. The Delaware story there is an investigation that is
ongoing. The story from Spain, the man accused is awaiting trial. An arrest has been
made in connection with the stabbing. The “persons of interest” were not arrested but
questioned.
The reason I chose the two stories were to contrast each other. The story from
Spain is international with a different judicial system. The report was not estranged from
the report from the states. The two were similar. The only thing that stuck out for me was
the man who stabbed was already guilty and not innocent until proven. Whereas the
“persons of interest” was innocent until proven guilty. They or he/she was questioned,
that was all. The man who stabbed his wife claimed that he did not kill his ex-wife, but
yet he was taken to jail to await trial.
Part 1) Lab Report
Part 2) Readings
Part 3) Term Project "Agenda Item"
Part 1: Lab Report
http://blogs.setonhill.edu/mt/mt.cgi
Part 2: Readings
http://blogs.setonhill.edu/JeremyBarrick/2007/09/el_200_portfolio_the_splinter_1.html
Part 3: Term Project, "Action Item"
http://blogs.setonhill.edu/JeremyBarrick/2007/09/part_3_the_big_red_one.html
I feel that the class and myself should participate in a journalism. Reason being, last semester the class and I had organized such a contest. I was in charge of sending the contest entries out and going to pick up submissions. I ended up having to complete the whole project due to other students not living around the area. The end result was completed. The contest could have been more thorough and better executed. Maybe this time. By the next portfolio, I want to have addresses, names of schools, grade levels, envelopes and stamps to be ready to send out with the proper information. The contest I want to porpose would be grade levels 10,11, and 12th local schools in the area. Jeannette, Greensburg Salem, Greensburg Central Cathloic and Latrobe.
Entries would have to come from their school newspapers. Students will have to choose from ten articles, narrow it down to five, then to three. First, second, and third places. Winners would get a chance to come study with a Seton Hill student in Media Lab for a day, so they can get a feel for what is to come.
The readings from the text: Not Necessarily the News
Today in the news, crap and more crap coming up. We are going to scare the hell
out of you by mock terrorism and weather that is not going to affect you, but in the
Bahamas.
For years the news has been built on one foundation, fear. An emotion that makes
us cringe when we hear a bump in the night or see a Muslim praying at the airport. If we
all fear something, then it will eventually happen. If we all watch the late news, we will
fear going to bed at night. If we fear e-coli and the imminent threat of dying from eating
nachos at the local gas station where attendant Fred Snyder forgot to wash hi hands after
unloading three dozen jalapeno peppers. Details at 11pm.
Do we live our lives according to the news? I think we all do to some extent. If
we want to know what to wear tomorrow, we watch the weather report. Patrons of the
morning news are much like zombies. Grabs their morning cup of java and zones out to
the news, ignoring nagging wife and annoying children. ‘Good morning, in the news
today, a seatbelt recall on all 2005 sport utility vehicles. The tired man continues to drink
his coffee and attempt to wake up. Ugggggggg! I hate mornings. ‘The safety commission
is warning all sport utility owners to not drive today. The seatbelts will not hold up in a
collision.’ The man finally awakes, gives his family a hug and a kiss, then drives away.
Barrick 2
“wait, is there something I am forgetting” All of a sudden, BAM! Gets hit head on, flies
through the windshield. While laying on the ground he remembers. “I should have paid
attention to the news.”
The world of news reporting and journalism is on the rise as war has broken out
and anything and everything is reported on. Problem is, there are so many outlets for the
news in modern day. The internet, pod casts, news print, etc…. Which one is accurate?
Which one is leaning one way or the other? I guess the answer comes to the readers
specifications.
News is not always “crap”, it can be educational or informative, pending on the
way it is cast or written. Brainwashing is something the media has gotten away with for
decades. To be persuaded is to go in half-assed. To be educated is to go in full force.
Fear one thing, the media. It can take control of you if you are not careful. Public
opinion gets more attention now than ever before. The media sells a product and we buy
it. We have become a nation of news hungry, ‘as seen on tv buying red-necks.
There you have it. The truth! It will one day set you free. Socrates would be
proud of me.
That was the assignment where we were supposed to write a reflection on journalist sterotypes/ come up with a mock article.
The assignment on Spetember 10, 2007 was consistant of timeline and the ntro to chapter 1.
I had learned that the name of the first newspaper west of the Allegheny Mountains was The Pittsburgh Gazette in 1786. The reason the Japenese attack on Pearl Harbor was a radio story because, There was no Sunday afternoon newspaper. Paper was invented in 105 bc in China. Why did early American newspapers carried little local news? They could not compete with the word of mouth. Where and when did the first commercial radio start broadcasting? KDKA in Pittsburgh 1920. And the word "anchor" was first used by Walter Kronkite during the CBS coverage of the 1952 presidential conventions.
The readings from the text: Not Necessarily the News
Today in the news, crap and more crap coming up. We are going to scare the hell
out of you by mock terrorism and weather that is not going to affect you, but in the
Bahamas.
For years the news has been built on one foundation, fear. An emotion that makes
us cringe when we hear a bump in the night or see a Muslim praying at the airport. If we
all fear something, then it will eventually happen. If we all watch the late news, we will
fear going to bed at night. If we fear e-coli and the imminent threat of dying from eating
nachos at the local gas station where attendant Fred Snyder forgot to wash hi hands after
unloading three dozen jalapeno peppers. Details at 11pm.
Do we live our lives according to the news? I think we all do to some extent. If
we want to know what to wear tomorrow, we watch the weather report. Patrons of the
morning news are much like zombies. Grabs their morning cup of java and zones out to
the news, ignoring nagging wife and annoying children. ‘Good morning, in the news
today, a seatbelt recall on all 2005 sport utility vehicles. The tired man continues to drink
his coffee and attempt to wake up. Ugggggggg! I hate mornings. ‘The safety commission
is warning all sport utility owners to not drive today. The seatbelts will not hold up in a
collision.’ The man finally awakes, gives his family a hug and a kiss, then drives away.
Barrick 2
“wait, is there something I am forgetting” All of a sudden, BAM! Gets hit head on, flies
through the windshield. While laying on the ground he remembers. “I should have paid
attention to the news.”
The world of news reporting and journalism is on the rise as war has broken out
and anything and everything is reported on. Problem is, there are so many outlets for the
news in modern day. The internet, pod casts, news print, etc…. Which one is accurate?
Which one is leaning one way or the other? I guess the answer comes to the readers
specifications.
News is not always “crap”, it can be educational or informative, pending on the
way it is cast or written. Brainwashing is something the media has gotten away with for
decades. To be persuaded is to go in half-assed. To be educated is to go in full force.
Fear one thing, the media. It can take control of you if you are not careful. Public
opinion gets more attention now than ever before. The media sells a product and we buy
it. We have become a nation of news hungry, ‘as seen on tv buying red-necks.
There you have it. The truth! It will one day set you free. Socrates would be
proud of me.
That was the assignment where we were supposed to write a reflection on journalist sterotypes/ come up with a mock article.
The assignment on Spetember 10, 2007 was consistant of timeline and the ntro to chapter 1.
I had learned that the name of the first newspaper west of the Allegheny Mountains was The Pittsburgh Gazette in 1786. The reason the Japenese attack on Pearl Harbor was a radio story because, There was no Sunday afternoon newspaper. Paper was invented in 105 bc in China. Why did early American newspapers carried little local news? They could not compete with the word of mouth. Where and when did the first commercial radio start broadcasting? KDKA in Pittsburgh 1920. And the word "anchor" was first used by Walter Kronkite during the CBS coverage of the 1952 presidential conventions.
Jeremy Barrick, a sophomore from Seton Hill University, has made several accomplishments during his Fall semester of 2007 at the college. Jeremy has written his third published article for the Setonian, regarding the SHU pipeband. The article was detailed as to the history of the band to current upcoming events. Jeremy has gooten feed back from one of his favorite editors and long time school chum, Kayla Sawyer.Kayla gave helpful hints for assistance on Jeremy's article in the Setonian. Kayla wrote the following: 1. After "Seton Hill University" always put SHU in parenthesis. I know, it's a stupid rule but it's what Jerz wants. So it should always read: blah blah blah at Seton Hill University (SHU) blah blah blah. Unless you never mention Seton Hill ever again in the article. Then you wouldn't need the acronym in parenthesis.
2. In the first sentence, you say "music comes to Seton Hill." If it started in August, isn't it already there? Might want to change "comes" to "is at."
3. Don't write out twenty-seven or thirteen. Numbers 10 and above are never written.
4. I think there should be a comma after 1600s.
5. Instead of: " first the bag is held under the left arm" I think it should read "the bag is first held under the left arm".
6. The sentence: " The pipe band had a great intro to their start" is a little redundant. "Intro" and "start" are the same. How about " The pipe band had a great beginning to the fall season..."
7. The F in fall is not capitalized. Seasons are never capitalized.
8. Leave out the "Saint" in " Saint Elizabeth Ann Seton" and her middle name as well. Perhaps "Elizabeth Seton, the patron saint of SHU"? People never get titles in news articles. You would never write Sister Mary Smith or Doctor Mary Smith. Just "Mary Smith, a doctor in Greensburg" or "Mary Smith, a sister at SHU".
9. Change: " Seton Hills Center for the Performing Arts" to "SHU's Center for Performing Arts"
and Erin Waite's quote about "Seton Hill" should be changed to "SHU". This is allowed because it's the same thing.
10. There should be a comma after "campus" in Waite's quote.
11. The S in sophomore is never capitalized.
12. You don't need to say that Waite goes to SHU. It is assumed. You would only need to say that if you had interviewed students from other campuses as well.
13. You don't need to say what they formerly were: "The Seton Hill Pipe Band has been competing for thirteen years (formerly the Allegheny and District Pipe Band) at difficult levels." You did that in the second sentence.
14. The sentence: " The chance to recognize new things and be cultured with all the campus has to offer." is incomplete. How about: "The pipe band offers the chance for students to recognize new things etc ..."
15. I don't think you're allowed to say your last sentence: "So take the opportunity to attend one of their concerts and witness the decadent sounds of the bagpipe." You're not really allowed to give advice, unless you have your own column or unless this is a music review. You also can't call it "decadent" because that's subjective -- unless it's a column or a review.
16. You wrote: " The Seton Hill Pipe Band" several times in the article. It should always be "the SHU Pipe Band." We only write "Seton Hill" once, when we put "(SHU)" after it. Then we always write "SHU".
17. You must have at least three sources. It is mandatory. You need quotes from two more different people.
As a copy editor, Kayla has proven herself worthy. Jeremy had taken Kayla's advice and revised his article. He had gotten several compliments on his story this far. Good luck to Jeremy and Kayla this year on a job well done.
Articles of True Crime
I chose to pick the two articles pertaining to the incident at Delaware State and a
crime story from Spain.
The first story happened on Friday morning as a gunman shot two students who
were seriously wounded. The next story took place in Spain, a 58 year old man stabbed
his ex-wife.
The Delaware shooting, police identified a suspect as “persons of interest” were
questioned.
The story from Spain, the man who had stabbed his wife was taken to the
Fontcalent prison in Alicante to await trial.
According to the layout of the judicial system, the two stories I chose only made it
to the entrance. Reported and observed crime, the two articles made it into print, so the
crimes were obviously observed. The Delaware story there is an investigation that is
ongoing. The story from Spain, the man accused is awaiting trial. An arrest has been
made in connection with the stabbing. The “persons of interest” were not arrested but
questioned.
The reason I chose the two stories were to contrast each other. The story from
Spain is international with a different judicial system. The report was not estranged from
the report from the states. The two were similar. The only thing that stuck out for me was
the man who stabbed was already guilty and not innocent until proven. Whereas the
“persons of interest” was innocent until proven guilty. They or he/she was questioned,
that was all. The man who stabbed his wife claimed that he did not kill his ex-wife, but
yet he was taken to jail to await trial.
Does crime necessarily pay for itself? I do believe that it does. A story is easier to get out if it is attached to an accident or a violent crime. This makes the audience want more. A story about a woman who was found hacked up is a lot more interesting than a stroy about a home and garden show. I feel we get more out of society when we bring them blood and guts.
A lead is just like writing a research paper. If you do not put your thesis at the beginning, you will be thrown off your high horse during the remainder of your paper. You focal point is the first few sentences. It then ascends to other info that supports the lead.
The article that Gomez had written was acurate and much to the point. Not all accidents have happy endings. Not all accidents can identify the victims. Patience comes to those who wait. If one wants to find out the names of the victims and where they lived, they would have to wait until the police have notified the families and once the bodies are identified. An accident can be morbid, but rather fun in how the information is displayed. The papers have to get the news out quickly, some information gets with held.
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