Assistant News Editor, Anne O'Nymous read the article.
Should be: Assitant News Editor, Anne O'Nymous, read the article. It was missing a comma after the name.
She was highly appreciated by Jameson for solving the
problem. "I really appreciate her work ethic and problem-solving ability," said
Repetitive. The paraphrased bit is the same as the quoted. To fix this, either remove the quote or remove the paraphrase.
Spunky Inkworthy has only written for The Setonian this year, but Obituaries Editor, Lazarus O'Mortigan,
was very complimentary towards Spunky's contributions.
Spunky Inkworthy should be referred to as Inkworthy instead of Spunky.
In a telephone call from Head Librarian Marian Paroo, she
discussed Inkworthy's contributions.
Should be: In a telephone call from Head Librarian, Marian Paroo, she discussed... There should be a comma between "Head librarian" and "Marian Paros"
"Here is a quote", said Bill Jones freshman.
Should be: "Here is a quote," said Bill Jones, a freshman. It was missing another comma in between "Jones" and "freshman."
By doing this exercise and learning about the style tips, I discovered that I had been incorrect when it comes to news writing styles. I am guilty of capitalized major names and class years. It seems as if there are more details to news writing than regular writing. But that could be because I am used to essay writing and creative writing and have never really written news before.