Too happy, but still informative

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This profile written about Dr. Mimi Silbert was too sentimental for my taste.  It starts out with a shocking statement, "Her following includes ex-convicts, former gang members, heroin and crack addicts and prostitutes."  This began to set the tone for the article about a rehabilitative center for people with troubled pasts.  It would be difficult to work in this field, there would obviously be many troubles that would arise.  However, this profile focuses completely on how unbelievably happy everyone is.  While that is wonderful that these people are turning their lives around, the writer is focusing completely on the bliss which makes everything seem too unrealistic and perfect.  There is a difference between being positive and being overwhelmingly gushy...  

Otherwise, this profile gives me a good sense of how to set up a profile.  Including quotes from others as well as facts.  But quotes seem to work better.

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