September 24, 2005

Comparison between spot news &"Setonian"

Although I was proud of the work I put into my spot news segment on the opening of De Chantal Hall, as I read the Setonian's article, I noticed some distinct differences. While I focused mostly on those attending the opening ceremony, Meredith Ponczak, author of Setonian's article, focused on Sr. DeChantal Leis' background, the open house specifically, and the structure of the residence hall. Ponczak also only included two quotes from students, while I had four. Through this comparison, I see that more is not always better.

Although I tried to focus on feelings and emotions, Ponczak gave a general overview that provided more information and was just an overall better article. I realize I should have chosen and angle and worked on that, rather than trying to cover several ideas at once.

I followed the inverted pyramid as I read the Setonian article-congrats! They must work just as hard with the AP style book as I do. I understand there is no "right way" for an article to be written, but from what I gather from the Asscoiated Press, both articles followed the pyramid template.

To make you own judgements, here's a copy of my article:

Brand New “Dish” Comes to Seton Hill University

The official opening and blessing of the new residence hall, De Chantal (a.k.a “Dish”), took place on September 12 at 4:00pm. The hall is named for Sister De Chantal Leis (SHU class of ’23), former Dean of Women and Director of Alumnae Relations. Built by Building Systems, Inc., De Chantal now houses 85 students; 61 more students will move-in when phase II is completed in November Sarah Rosenberg, R.A. for Canevin/Lowe calls De Chantal “beautiful, if you like having roommates and sharing space.”

Senior Tim Blasko, resident of “Dish” says, “I like it. We don’t have a cleaning lady and we have to pay for our own toilet paper, but living here is like having our own apartment. And even though it’s a long walk, Seton Hill almost feels like a real campus.” Each room is equipped with 2 double rooms, 2 single rooms, a common room, shower, and bath; the building is also air-conditioned. A kitchen and laundry facilities are located on the second floor of each building for all residents to share.

“Last year our roof leaked into our room onto an electrical outlet. I was a little nervous about the same contractors building this hall, but they did a great job,” says Diana Geleskie, former resident of Farrell Hall.

When asked to comment on the new dorm, Associate Dean of Student Services and Director of Resident Life, Dr. Robin Anke, commented on the use of the word “dorm.” She says Seton Hill provides resident halls, rather than dormitories. According to Dr. Robin, dorm is Latin for “to be dormant” and our residence halls are not just a place to sleep; there are floor programs and pretty soon we’ll have pool table and other activities.

Posted by KatherineLambert at September 24, 2005 07:32 PM
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Lamb ----

Sometimes covering everything can be interesting, too. I think it is nice to have a broad scope, especially since our class leaves it open for whatever we want to do.

Posted by: Katie Aikins at September 25, 2005 06:40 PM
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