Applying the Rules
After reading the hand out on the AP style tips, I realized there had been a lot of information that I had assumed was correct for news writing just because it was correct for writing else where (such as English papers). One that I really crashed and burned on with the obituary was the rule "Do not include 'Dr.' as part of a faculty member's name" (2). I had never even considered that this would be a point that I would need to edit.
With these rules, I feel more confident about writng a news article. I feel like I have more direction to what detail I need to pay attention to. Now that I have read these rules, I'll probably pay close attention to my own writing, even if it's not for News Writing.
Here's what I found wrong with the examples on the course page (or at least what I thought was wrong):
1. Assistant News Editor, Anne O'Nymous read the article.
The comma should be taken out between Editor and Anne. I still think this sentence looks funny so there might be something else wrong with it.
2. She was highly appreciated by Jameson for solving the problem. "I really appreciate her work ethic and problem-solving ability," said Jameson.
The whole first sentence isn't necessary because it is telling. The quote shows he obviously appreciated her abilities.
3.Spunky Inkworthy has only written for The Setonian this year, but Obituaries Editor, Lazarus O'Mortigan, was very complimentary towards Spunky's contributions.
Either say "the obituaries editor" and use lowercase for obituaries and editor or take out the comma between Editor and Lazarus if you are using it as a title. Once again, I still think it looks funny.
4. In a telephone call from Head Librarian Marian Paroo, she discussed Inkworthy's contributions.
I don't really know if you should keep "Head Librarian" capitalized or not. It looks like it's being used as a title, however I would just rewrite the whole sentence completely to look like "Marian Paroo, the head librarian, discussed Inkworthy's contributions in a telephone call."
5. "Here is a quote", said Bill Jones freshman.
I would move the "freshman" to go before "Bill Jones" so it reads "said freshman Bill Jones".
That's what I could figure out from the rules and the examples. Let me know what you think!