Archive for October, 2011
Both articles use quotes well embedding them into the article, however the first article did not use an article until lower in the article. Quotes are power as journalist and it is important to at least have one earlier in the text. The first quote we see in the “Kicking Queen” article was a good quote, but should have been used earlier. Story one does a good job of making sure readers have a full understanding
The second article uses quotes in my opinion better than the first article. The quotes are quality quotes and they are introduced early in the article. I like how the second article first talks about her career and then her history. I think this is a technique I could use in my own peer review. Both articles use quotes from a variety of people which is an important technique according to Kershner.
Recently in class we’ve been assigned to write peer profiles. At first I thought it would be difficult but as you begin speaking to the individual it really does seem as if you know the person. Reading Kershner chapter 24 I found helpful tips that eased my mind on what a profile is, and what it should include.
“People’s personalities are complex…In order to make a profile readable, the writer must choose one aspect of the person’s personality and make it the dominant theme in the article.”
I found this passage by Kershner important because, you learn so much about a person during these interviews, but you cannot write it all without the story being jumbled. From my experience with my profile this is the first thing I realized as I began writing. As you start drafting it is ok to write about everything the person does, but as you look over that draft choose an aspect that would be most interesting to readers because that is who the article is for. I find it is easier to find your focus after drafting, because the most dominant aspects you write about are what you should focus on then go back and remove what appears to be unrelated or sudden information.