Wake Up and Put on your Shoes
Go Outside and Sing the Blues
Today's too Nice to sit Inside
Go outdoors and Let Out a Sigh!
It's Sunny and the Day is New
Don't Regret what you Could Do
Let Down Your Hair
And Take a Ride because
You never want this Day to Die
When the Sun goes Down
Get in Your Car
Turn Up the Music
You're Finally Free
Filled With nothing but Glee
Go Home and Dream
Smile to Yourself
And Be Proud!
I like the rhyme scheme in this poem. Alot of people dislike poems that go against the usual AB form of rhyming, but personally i think it gives a poem a personal touch, as well as making it more interesting. Keep up the good work.
Gina, I like the unorthodox capitalization. Instead of marking the stressed words with stressed syllables, you marked them with capital letters; it creates an interesting effect.
I love the images created by this poem. Summer, light, fun. How I miss summers.
Your rhyming scheme is great too. So many people feel as if they must carry a rhyme scheme on throughout the poem once they start, but you have conquered that juvenile technique. What a wonderful thing to see.
Keep writing, dear. I would love to read more.
I like dashes! -- -- --
The Form reminds me of Emily Dickinson
Except for one Thing -- the Dashes!
Wow Gina.....this is awesome...I really wish I could write free verse like some of you guys. I'm going to try and work on that for this paper...
Good Job!
Tiffany