January 28, 2004

First Stab: Fifty-Word Fiction

I haven't done this before, so please be kind. Fifty-word fiction seems like something a journalist should be really good at...I hope I will be with a little practice. Or a lot. I have been accused of being acutely verbose :-( :-)

Black or was it blank? Is this what blind people see? Damn. Stupid bed. That's gonna hurt tomorrow. Just a little bit farther to the door...Eyes adjusted now, and then a shadow--a sink. A turn, and too many gulps. Too much water. To bed now, a chaste drunk.

Posted by Amanda Cochran at January 28, 2004 8:23 PM

That's awesome! I took a stab at it myself, but didn't like the way it sounded on paper so it may take a few days for me to get the courage to post something like it...who knows, maybe I'll like it eventually like blogging?


Posted by: Tiffany at January 28, 2004 11:19 PM

Not bad, in my opinion, Amanda. I wasn't brave enough to post any I tried... Yours is rather poetic, as you mentioned on my blog. I really like it though. I think the fragmentation of your phrases adds to the free-style feel of your flash fic first.

Posted by: Karissa at January 28, 2004 11:33 PM

We really like alliteration don't we? "First Stab: Flash Fiction, flash fic first" :-D

Posted by: Amanda at January 29, 2004 8:03 AM

haha, it's simple to be sucked into the scintillating satisfaction of syllables.

mwhahaha! :^)

Posted by: Karissa at January 29, 2004 11:46 AM

I took a stap at it too. Then I took the plunge and posted it. Yours is better though.

Posted by: Diana at January 29, 2004 1:29 PM

Well well. We meet again? or for the first time. Nevermind, I was just wondering if Diana had spell check cause I'd like to know what a "stap" is, in context to her comment. But I love Diana so that was just a playful comment (insert lovingly coy face here)

Posted by: Puff at January 29, 2004 4:29 PM

Mr. Complexy Man, now tell me, why do you think Bernice is the stronger character? hehehehe

I have never been in a class that has been that crazy. We have a long and wonderful semester to look forward to. :-D

Posted by: Amanda at January 29, 2004 6:18 PM

Not bad, Amanda. But what you need to realize is that these "fifty word fiction" stories are actually more twisted than what you wrote. I am not putting you down, so don't get mad. But the other stories are a little more shrilling, and they send a tingle up a person's spine. Yours, well, just make me think "not bad."

By the way, I don't comment on my own writings!:^P

Posted by: Jay at January 30, 2004 10:54 AM

Thank you for the constructive criticism, Jay. I appreciate it.

I also appreciate that you mentioned your own preference--"shrilling." I tend to write more sedate pieces by nature...I am really not the shrew you all believe me to be. Go ahead and laugh. And again, flash fiction, I assume is like many different types of writing, it has many styles. Your style is not mine, but I will attempt to diversify myself for my audience, and in this case: you.

Posted by: Amanda at January 30, 2004 2:39 PM
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