February 5, 2004

An Elevated Ride

A Little Diddy for all to enjoy:

Pairs of steps clacked the granite floor, as the button lit up in a tarnished yellow from too many pushes. With long gray hair in disarrayed braids, Grace let her cane thump faintly against the polished surface. Standing behind them, Grace noticed the young lady first, for she knew she was a lady, with all that tailored tweed. Then she angled her gaze to the tall middle-aged fellow at the young lady’s side; with a neatly clipped beard and a prodigious comb-over, the man insisted on pressing the glossy lit button like a child caressing his favorite Aggie. Grace waited in silence, listening to the pair converse in the brusque tones of business.
“You see Mr. Fromwell, I have many plans that I would like to incorporate here at Fromwell & Fromwell. I think I would be wonderful in the advertising campaign. Just give me chance. I’m sure I won’t let you down.”
“Yes, well, we could talk this over for lunch, are you free, Miss Grace?” a light baritone responded.
“Well, ah-ah No. I don’t believe I have anything planned.”
“We could go to Georgiana’s over on Fifth…Have you ever been there before?”
“No--”
A muffled ding called from the rectangle, and the slow door opened the dam of briefcases, suits, and pumps; a flow that left as quickly as it had come.
Clinging to a purse as large as her head, Grace slowly emerged from her concealed spot behind a great potted fern, pushing the branches out of her eyes. The couple was already inside the metal box. She shuffled toward the entrance, hesitating, looking down between the cracks as she made the last pregnant steps onto the short, gray carpet.

Posted by Amanda Cochran at February 5, 2004 1:40 PM
Comments

First Place! Well I guess I should comment on how you could change this, but I was sitting next to you when you wrote it, and helped you with it...So I am free of that obligation. Looks like the only thing I had left to do was get the first entry. (insert coy look of witty charm...or not)(then insert wink after that comment)

Posted by: Puff at February 5, 2004 4:28 PM

Amanda, I'm not sure that I understand what is going on. Is Grace and Miss Grace the same person? Otherwise...Excellent!

Tiffany

Posted by: Tiffany at February 5, 2004 4:29 PM

Your story is great! :-) This might sound crazy but is the old lady from the future? That would be really cool. I hope you post the rest of your story, I want to hear what is going to happen. :)

Posted by: SueMyers at February 5, 2004 7:14 PM

Yes, Grace and Miss Grace are the same person.

In truth, Sue, I hadn't thought of that--but I will consider it for the conclusion of the story.

And Puff, let me clarify how you helped me. Concerning the content of my story you had no part, except in the wonderful subject of elevators. I just want to clarify that for my grade on this assignment--but thank you for the all the proofreading help. *Lots of winkies for witty man*.

Posted by: Amanda at February 6, 2004 12:25 AM
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