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March 19, 2006
Here are the Noted Changes on the Critical Essay:
I bulked up my thesis simply from discussing similarities between Eve and Cleo, but I also compared Antony and Adam with evidence of their great differences and similarities. My claim was that the snakes were what Cleo and Eve alike, which was just not good enough. There was too much discussion of asps already, so I focused my claim more on the principal of women using their bodies for power as well as their minds. The data I collected was from a bigger variety of sources such as Holland, Frost, Cicero, and old Plutarch. I really enjoyed the stupid movie quote, so try not to knock it too much for its cheesiness. I used a good counter-warrant by stating that Antony was unlike Adam in the way that he was a party-guy even before his woman. I also used the what the Clown in the play said about Cleopatra to bring home the point that Cleopatra was seen as evil. I really tried to make many more connections and show more evidence of my warrant and counter-warrant in this version.
Posted by ErinWaite at March 19, 2006 10:39 PM